Jeevan ki raah mein bhatak rahe hain hum,
Manzil kab aayegi yeh jaanta hai kaun?
Chalte raho bas yahi hai iss safar ka paigaam,
Raahon mein kitne kaante hain yeh jaanta hai kaun?
Chodte chale ja rahen hain apne pairon ke nishaan,
Jeetenge kab hum yeh jaanta hai kaun?
Naare lagaate chale ja rahen hain hum apne haq ke liye,
Insaaf kitno ko milega yeh jaanta hai kaun?
Himmat se aagey badh bas yahi hai hamara uddeshya,
Kal kya hoga aakhir yeh jaanta hai kaun?
-Monu Awalla
6 comments:
I have sent you a mail regarding what you enquired of me. If you didnt get it please inform me. Thank you for your comments. It meant a lot
You are right that Poetry does not really depend on rhyming. Poetry is like the whole palm constricted to become a fist. It is poetry when the fist can give a really strong punch....even if there is no rhyming. And if it cant give the punch then even rhyming will not make it poetry.
I am glad about the freedom you have given me to communicate in my inherent critical way...
Thank you Jerly for your E-mail.
Forgot to say that I liked the theme of this poem of yours
In the new poem I have written, I have used the word 'rarity' to mean "almost non existent". This is one of the meanings of having freedom in terms of grammer. I also wanted to add that though rhyming may not be absolutely essential, I think 'rhythm' is essential to the verses. I have tried a differnt rhyming this time compared to the other two earlier ones. hope u will look it up
I liked you poem Monu. Wah wah!
poems are not my cup of tea but that doesn't prevent me from commenting when i see good ones. see you.
so sweet of you chitra. thank you very much indeed!
wah kya poem hai it reminds me a song..Vo sikandar hi doston kehlaata hai. Haari baazi ko jeetna jise aata hai ....jo jeeta wo sikandar aur jo hara wo bandar:D
well ...so inspirational liked it :)
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